Monday, January 24, 2011

Unpleasantness (Acrostic)

Hi all,

My latest poem is a challenging prompt from Acrostic Only. The theme is an acrostic sonnet using iambic pentameter. If you are interested in a challenge, please check it out!

Under whelmed by the power he possessed
Notwithstanding his looks were quite obtuse
Petrified of this union, she confessed
Love in her hesitant, chased, and misused
Eternity a symbol from his lips
Aiding his persuasion, amassed in gold
Saturated in jewels, queen of his ship
Acquire mere fortune, she wavered ice cold
Notes in mascara, regret’s only song
Triumphant storm, she devoured her rain cloud
Neglected her heart, thought it cruel and wrong
Enigma in white lace, she cried aloud
Satin train through the window seeking night
Satiated by the freedom of flight


Kilauea Poetry said...

This was! I'll check it out..very creative as usual-

Nanka said...

Quite an unpleasantness situation, a total disaster!!

bel said...

Ha! A challenge like "acrostic sonnet using iambic pentameter" would send me running, but you mastered it. Wonderful!

septembermom said...

This felt like strong, powerful music building in intensity. Loved how you layered it with the imagery.

I did the vlog if you want to come by and "see" me.

Amias (ljm and liquidplastic) said...

I always enjoy every attempt you make, when weaving words like a snake ... some of the rhyming seems a little force, but this is a beautiful, yet unpleasant story. Especially loved the last two lines.

Amias (ljm and liquidplastic) said...

Congratulations, your poem is a WINNER in Acrostic Only Prompts for January 2011. Click here to pick up your badge.
Don’t forget to congratulate other winners.

Jim said...

Congratulations on this one. I was peeking at our April list and ran noticed (again??) that the January Winners were posted.

I liked your sonnet here. O that she could be free once more! At first I thought her delema was does she cook her golden goose? Second reading showed me there is deeper meaning. I think he must have been a golden crockodile.

Again congratulations. My last sonnet on OSI was "Angels on My List last July. They are fun to write. Mine don't always have ten syllable per line. I have read that requirement has been relaxed.