Monday, March 28, 2011

Hollow (O.S.I.)

Hi all,

This week's theme at O.S.I. is hollow. I am using alliteration in this piece.

Her hollow heart
Hoping and
Holding her
Heroines with halos
Hoist her
Helium and heat
Her hollow heart


Jim said...

I like your alliteration, W.G. There is more too because of the short lines, mostly three and and one worders. I use internal rhyme once in a while and also internal alliteration (if there is such a thing).

Thank you for your nice comment. I am not sure my man has to be old but I did't want him young either. More old men than young men are badly tied to drink (I think).

Patti said...

Loved the alliteration and the image your poem portrayed. Thanks! Hope you are having a great week!

Ramesh Sood said...

Hearteningly Hinteresting and hexatraordinary..

I loved your take.. nothing Hollow here.. full of wisdom and creativity..

Jingle said...

beautiful word flow.
you rock.

Carina said...

How heartfelt!

Kim Nelson said...

What a great approach to the prompt. Lots of fun to read and the message is clear.
Here's Mine:

SandyCarlson said...

Incredible, my friend.

Kilauea Poetry said...

Nice piece..very creative- as usual!! Enjoy your evening my dear~

JStar said...

Very telling of a hollow heart...I have def been here

PremI said...

Has a Hidden message...
not a Hollow one.

Lynette Killam said...

A terrific piece, Write Girl, with its wonderful alliteration! One can clearly feel the pain, as well as the progress made on that journey toward healing...

So glad you stopped by my page...:)

Imagination Lane

♥~Judy~♥ said...

I love your alliteration - should join the alphabet themes.

gabrielle said...

A hollow heart holding her, giving comfort. Beautiful!