Hi all,
This poem is written for O.S.I. This week's theme is rambling.
Us
Rambling
Foolish hearts
Sitting real tall
Shooting with the wind
Riding the morning sun
Chasing our stilted shadows
Following children after dark
Drinking in summer’s endless nights
Up
Rambling
The dawn laughs
Wet, new morning
Rain showers soak us
Dancing feet in couplets
Embracing the body of time
Riding on the surprise of love
Living and loving and rambling on
12 comments:
There's a song on one of my dad's old records called "Rambles of Spring" ... it's stuck in my head now : ) It's very different from your poem here, but it shares some themes. I'm off to try to find it on iTunes now ... :-)
I can so relate to this... fantastic piece!
"Living and loving and rambling on"
Awesome!
Just felt it in front of my eyes as I read through...Amazing...Is this a special form of writing??...I like the pyramid formation...the essence is well captured and woven...:))
'Living and loving and rambling on..'
I just loved this! Ya, the form and it gave me some nostalgic feelings- especially
"Riding in the morning sun..Drinking in summer’s endless nights"
Excellent-
Your words manage to evoke such vivid images! Beautiful!
Love all these visual loving words. The form is neat.
Beautiful. I hear and smell a summer day in this one!
"Rain showers soak us
Dancing feet in couplets"
rainy season here in Mumbai is about to start. First showers expected any day now. ---Living, loving & rambling!
i cannot help but to imagine wonderful music and a song bubbling somewhere with this poem...
you are so creative.
love the shape.
Great, W.G. I was riding with along with you even before I read that word (in both verses your poet was riding).
My favorite was this line:
Rain showers soak us
mainly because we found out who us was in the 'stanza' before.
Second fave was:
Dancing feet in couplets
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