Monday, March 18, 2013

Clandestine Feast


Gradation
Of the truth
Shamelessly smiles
With an invitation
For a sumptuous evening
Faun and horse delight
With wine and sweets
But I, the bird, know
They fatten me up
For feeding

Inspired by Pablo Picasso's Faun, Horse, and Bird 
O.S.I. (Clandestine)

16 comments:

SandyCarlson said...

Eerie! Thanks for this evocative piece.

Jim said...

Beautiful, W.G. Beware of fauns, especially if this ones horse is holding you down and the faun is force feeding you.
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Green Speck said...

It's better not to fatten up !!!

Harshad Mehta said...

Oh, That is a trap. And one must avoid it. Very brilliantly put.

Lyn said...

Vigilance! You caught the essense..really like this one, fellow NYer!!

Heather Fields said...

I love the fattening up part! 'Tis true...

Jinksy said...

Erm... a small point...methinks the 's' should disappear as per 'I, the bird, know ' etc.
Typos are such pests, eh?
Scary thought, waiting to be eaten...

Berowne said...

Quite clever, beautifully innovative...

Ginny Brannan said...

The poem, and way that you captured this image are excellent! I would not change a thing, but as Jinksy said, a few small corrections are in order. Agree with Jinksy, to lose the"s" in "knows" to make it "know," a small spelling correction to add "u" in "Graduations" would also would lose the second "s" in smiles, as graduations is plural, so think smile should be singular in this case.

"Graduations
of the truth
shamelessly smile
with an invitation
for a sumptuous evening.
Faun and horse delight
with wine and sweets
but I, the bird, know
they fatten me up
for feeding."

Very nicely composed, my favorite Mag so far.

The Write Girl said...

Hi all, thanks for your comments. I meant to use the word gradation (gradual change) but I agree that the (s) should be removed. Thank you!!

Sankara Jayanth said...

intelligent. as harshad ji said, a trap. well done. :)

Little Nell said...

There's quite a sinister feel to this; they're being lured in, and only one of them is wise enough to know. Well done.

Susan Lindquist said...

Oh, to be the captive feast ... knowing one's fate can sometimes be such a curse! Clever take on this image, Write Girl! A cautionary poem, well done!

Tess Kincaid said...

Very clever take...love it...

Kutamun said...

Ha ha, beware men with horns and cloven hooves bearimg gifts, great write, Write !

Gillena Cox said...

awesome Ekphrastic Poem

much love...