Hi bloggers,
This poem is written for O.S.I. The theme this week is pause.
She paused
With each heart beat
Rising crescendo
Butterfly heart
Singing alive
She paused
Full of rhythm
And soul
Red beauty
Pulsating and whole
Laying her palm
Against her chest
She paused
9 comments:
Wow nice flow kind of sultry I liked this a lot!
I agree with Amanda--it really does have a sultry feel to it. Nicely done.
Neat and quickly developed, I get the feel of a blues or jazz singer - the physical shape of the poem also supportive - feminine, exciting - nice use of the pause.
I enjoyed it, felt it, that's it..
This is so refreshing
'butterfly heart'
I felt that. beautiful (as always!)
good one.
Love the stop and go of this piece. I was engaged fully.
Love the slight hesitations within your words, creates an elusive feel of romance.
Petrina
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