Monday, November 8, 2010

Pause (O.S.I.)

Hi bloggers,
This poem is written for O.S.I. The theme this week is pause.

She paused
With each heart beat
Rising crescendo
Butterfly heart
Singing alive
She paused
Full of rhythm
And soul
Red beauty
Pulsating and whole
Laying her palm
Against her chest
She paused

9 comments:

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

Wow nice flow kind of sultry I liked this a lot!

Teresa said...

I agree with Amanda--it really does have a sultry feel to it. Nicely done.

brokenpenwriter said...

Neat and quickly developed, I get the feel of a blues or jazz singer - the physical shape of the poem also supportive - feminine, exciting - nice use of the pause.

Ramesh Sood said...

I enjoyed it, felt it, that's it..

JStar said...

This is so refreshing

bel said...

'butterfly heart'

I felt that. beautiful (as always!)

Harshad mehta said...

good one.

septembermom said...

Love the stop and go of this piece. I was engaged fully.

Reflections said...

Love the slight hesitations within your words, creates an elusive feel of romance.

Petrina